An eval bullet is to highlight work without having to read through flowery adjectives.  Eval bullets get right to the source of what was completed or accomplished.  Immediately it lets the reader know what you’ve done.

There’re a couple of steps to take in writing an eval bullet. Ask the question Who, What was done? and what was the result/impact? Here is an eval bullet we can use as an example:
A skillful instructor, qualified to teach an additional 8 courses, increased the Learning Site readiness to 95%.

Who?
A skillful instructor, qualified to teach an additional 8 courses, increased the Learning Site readiness to 95%.

What was done?
A skillful instructor, qualified to teach an additional 8 courses, increased the Learning Site readiness to 95%.

Result / Impact:
A skillful instructor, qualified to teach an additional 8 courses, increased the Learning Site readiness to 95%. 


Another important fact is to ask you’re self “who are my readers”? What do they need to know about me? Keep your focus by writing this information down so you know who the readers are and what they are looking for.

Tips

Write to inform. Don’t assume your readers will understand what you know.   You have to generate the interest of the reader in your opening statement and then point out why the information is relevant.

Changing passive verbs to active verbs you'll change your style from dull, impersonal and long-winded to vigorous, interesting and readable.

Cut out as much of the passive verb as possible here is an example: 
Passive: The advancement exam is expected to take about one hour. 
             Delete is expected to add ‘s’ to take
Active:  The advancement exam takes about one hour.

Note: Passive sentences are often wordy.

Avoid jargon, cliches and foreign words, if you confuse the reader with jargon attention could be taken away from previously expressed highlights.

Read and Revise everything you write prior to submitting up the chain.

Find out works for you and show someone how!